Cordelia drabble

[xlivvielockex]

I really thought my muse would never return to me unless she was poked and prodded but this was stuck in my head. Maybe the lack of sleep. It is in the style I usually write for my original publications and not the "fanfic" style I seemed to have developed.

Title: Aftermath
Author: xlivvielockex
Rating: PG
Character: Cordelia
Word Count: 100

Slowly dying. Pounding. Throbbing. Pain in every bone. Their pain. Filling her head. Bursting forth like Athena. Every nerve tingling. On burning fire. Light hurts. Sound hurts. Touch hurts. Life hurts. She knows this. She sees this. She lives this. Can’t even lay still. Room spins around. Sick. Rising up in her throat. Spilling out like guts. Like the vision. Tastes like pizza and OJ. Always. Mostly acid. It burns. Adds to the burning behind her eyes. Tears. Trying to wet her eyes. What she says, if caught. Crying against the torment. Hers. Theirs. His. Sleep comes. Darkness. Like death.

Comments

[boy-named-susie.livejournal.com]

Okay, you knew I would love this before you even posted it, right? So awesome, I love it when you do stream of consciousness stuff. You just rock at that, it's such a major strength you have. It's one of those things that if well done seems so natural and easy but is way difficult to write. You just rock!

[xlivvielockex.livejournal.com]

I am all late to the party with replying to my comments. LOL I always am.

But thank you for such great feedback. You rock too! Don't forget that.

The stream of consciousness stuff works with some pieces, the most confusing times. I don't think I could write this for every character. Especially not the more logical ones of the 'verse.

PS. I had this Lorne crack!fic idea but it is not coming out of my brain. Smack me please. Get it to work!

[boy-named-susie.livejournal.com]

*SMACK* Did that help? No, well have another *SMACK*

[samsom.livejournal.com]

Wonderful, and painful. Probably exactly how it happens for her, getting worse each time. Somtimes, I think "beautiful suffering" - she suffers, she sees, and it's sort of like being touched by the divine.

Stream of consciousness works so well when used right, and you've used it amazingly well. I sort of want more.

[xlivvielockex.livejournal.com]

Wow, thank you. Your feedback means so much to me, you have no idea. I think it is because you are just so amazing. I really look up to you as a writer so thanks a ton. :)